"you can't just walk away..."


courtesy myniceprofile.com

It was that day when I came to know,
my face turned pink with some unusual glow…
The day that made me feel so special,
the nature around started some lovely carol…

Yes, he is in love with me,
it didn’t really matter what others' take would be...
All I know is that our lives would change,
maybe it already has, which isn’t strange…

As days passed by, I developed a strong bond,
to every feeling of mine, he did respond…
It wasn’t visible from the outside,
as our souls started playing from inside… 

I was waiting for those beautiful moments,
as we prepared to tell our respective in laws…
I started dreaming being his lovely wedded wife, 
a wonderful gift to become his better half for life…

I woke up that day, by far the worst day of my life ever,
I saw his message that said 'everything between us is now over'...
I thought this could be my illusion,
but it wasn't, his responses were none…

My worst nightmares turned real,
how I wished it to be unreal…
I felt as if I lost a piece of my heart,
I never even dreamt that we could ever be apart..

I cried and cried for days waiting for a reply,
but my tears.. they never seemed to dry...
what was my mistake I always wondered,
but my questions remained unanswered...

I still have hopes that you will come one day,
coz, I know that you can't just walk away...
P.S: Special thanks to my wifey for reviewing and correcting some of the mistakes :) 

Comments

Saru Singhal said…
This is awesome Sunil...I love the last 6 lines so much. Life is so unpredictable and relations even more.
For your wife - She did a great job. Take her out for shopping!
Dude..y such depressing poem? :P Its good though! :) Come up with something which gives a happy feeling :P
Like this http://sunilpadiyar.blogspot.com/2009/11/to-someone-special.html
Or
http://sunilpadiyar.blogspot.com/2009/07/it-cant-get-better-than-this.html
Sunil Padiyar said…
@Saru - Well, first of all thank you so much :) Glad you liked it. And shopping, :( now that leaves me no choice but to take her ;) :P

@Devi - Ha ha.. Sure buddy, was actually in a depressing mood and had come up with even worse one... But then, changed a bit..
Sneha Sunny said…
hug your wife from my side...(you can take a chance and kiss her as well ;-). We are not watching!!)

really lovely emotional poem.... ask her to teach me as well.
Sunil Padiyar said…
haha :) Sure....will do;) this is much better than the shopping option ;) Thanks for your comments :)
Leo said…
Very nicely written poem this, and you did incorporate all the emotions too; just a question, why you put it from the girl's perspective? :)

I guess Preethika would love the shopping that Saru suggests B-) Good luck to the wallet ;)
sowmya said…
soulful lines with good flow...
Sunil Padiyar said…
Thanks Leo. Well, I just gave it a try.. To write something different.. And yeah priti loves shopping... (I know, thats obvious for gals :))

Thank you Sowmya...
Saru Singhal said…
Coming again to read it...It's awesome:)
Sunil - earlier comment didn't appear for some reason, so writing again.

Very nice one, liked the overall flow. But for some reason I started feeling that this is poetic version of the story (only first half though) that you told us about your love. Waiting for the second half :)

// Thote
Sunil Padiyar said…
@Saru - you are always welcome :)

@Gowdru - ha ha.. you remember that ah! well, no it isn't related to that in anyway.. after all, I don't even care about it now :) thanks for the comments :)
jojofeelings said…
A very intense poem. Shows that you were in a depressed mindset. Life is very uncertain and you portray the same exceptionally beautifully.
subtlescribbler said…
hey! this is very beautifully penned...and i loved it how u ended the poem, makes it even more touching. great work :D


sarah
Sunil Padiyar said…
Thanks a lot Sarah :) Glad you liked it :)

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